Friday, November 11, 2011

Paragraph Fix Up

OLD VERSION:


Many concerns of nuclear power reside within the fear factor. Due to extreme nuclear accidents such as Chernoyble which occurred in Russia as well as Three Mile Island which occurred in Pennsylvania, many American’s believe nuclear power is unsafe because they cause these mass destructions. Having a concern is appropriate because of these circumstances, but I believe that Americans are getting the wrong impression of nuclear energy. Our society is blinded by all of the negative media, that they fail to look at the reality in numbers. The American Energy Independence Society stated that “if people look at the actual record, as opposed to the sensationalist speculation, there has never been a member of the public injured by a nuclear plant in the United States”(article 2). The lack of support for nuclear energy is the supposively because of how dangerous this form of energy is. Yes, nuclear energy has the potential to do a great deal of harm, but one needs to look at the probability of this actually happening. It is said that working in a nuclear plant is safer than being a realtor selling houses ()…Those against nuclear power will argue back by bringing up the Chernobyl accident and how many had died in the midst of the explosion. In a BBC program that aired in sdkfj, they said that thousands of people had died there. But, according to the UN report, only 45 people died, and those 45 were mainly rescue teams who tried to extinguish the fire. Americans don’t even think about the smog of 1952 when 5,000 people died from coal poisoning. It’s like our society is pointing a dirty finger. James Lovelock believes that, “what stands against the use of nuclear power is not sensible scientific or economic arguments but a widespread, unjustified public fear.” (article1). This fear is descripting nuclear’s chance of survival in the US, despite all of its positive attributes.

NEW VERSION:

                 Ultimately, the major concern with nuclear power is the fear of the public. Due to extreme nuclear accidents such as Chernobyl, Japan, and Three Mile Island, many Americans believe that nuclear power is unsafe because they have to ability to cause destruction. The concerns of the people are appropriate, but I believe that Americans are getting the wrong impression of nuclear energy. Because our society is blinded by all of the negative media, they fail to look at the reality in numbers. The American Energy Independence Society stated that “if people look at the actual record, as opposed to the sensationalist speculation, there has never been a member of the public injured by a nuclear plant in the United States” (Moore). Yes, nuclear energy does have the potential to do a great deal of harm, but people need to look at the probability of this actually happening. Due to various studies, The Bureau of Labor Statistics has proven that it is safer to work in a nuclear plant then it is working in real estate (NEI).

          Despite these statistics, many people still believe it is unsafe because of how many people had allegedly died in the midst of the Chernobyl explosion. In a BBC program that aired in 1986, it was reported that thousands of people had died in the accident. But, according to the UN report, only 45 people died, and those 45 were rescue teams who tried to extinguish the fire. Americans don’t even think about the smog of 1952 that left 5,000 people dead due to coal poisoning. James Lovelock believes that “what stands against the use of nuclear power is not sensible scientific or economic arguments but a widespread, unjustified public fear” (AEI). This fear is diminishing the chances of survival for nuclear energy despite all of its positive attributes.